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Do you like storm poetry?
COLOSSAL LOSS
It gathers swiftly overhead, from all sides,
Roiling clouds in every hue of gray…
So many more than fifty shades.
This storm reminds me of you.
Holding back until, with a flash, the sky is rent;
Lash-whip blasts, bolts that break the walls…
The apocalypse or a continental avalanche;
Thor’s Hammer in the power of a clenched fist.
The storm doesn’t last long; despite all the fury
Released into being, mindlessly and without mercy,
It subsides as suddenly as it set in-
I am left drowning in your emotional floodwaters.
A chasm, rifted earth where my garden once grew,
Mud and roots, tiny shoots that won’t live to bear fruit;
But I will grow others from these seeds I held on to
While your colossal torrent was ruining the rest of my world.
6 Answers
- Caz :) xLv 76 years ago
It's a storm in a tea-cup LOL
WOW , what a really great poem
I am left drowning in your emotional floodwaters ..... ''Excellent !
The whole poem has So, many messages, I'm going to read it again when I have more time ... You write from within, and take the reader with you on a emotional journey ... Great stuff LC
- Mythical TalesLv 66 years ago
Very good poem, and most importantly, it ended strongly.
And to answer your question, I love storm poetry; it's chaotic like writing is, itself. And I love anything "dark" when it comes to poetry.
Source(s): https://www.facebook.com/schizobunny - Anonymous6 years ago
This is good stuff: says a lot in a compact, convincing form, with a good use of rhythm and sound.
BUT I'd ditch the reference to "50 shades" of you-know-what. It's unintentionally comic, and I'm sure that wasn't what you intended.
- of Me of HimLv 66 years ago
In likeness I drew its real and its end spoke of out side looking in with I in heart, as the in-tack soul-wish hearten stand him of every truth in mind of you
even so as I was seen by words, my body; I stood firm, his own minds love time of As wilderness time truth of his hope of Hope stands.
If no where go I still have You
"But I will grow others from these seeds I held on to"
- 5 years ago
I like how you always make it seem like you have nothing to do with causing the problems in the first place.It was always your psycho behavior that made me tthe way I was! You changed me in bad ways, I used to be different, but the things that you did to me and never want to admit are what caused me to change for the worse!!!!!!
